Category: Writers Block
as the fear shown in his eyes the earth trembled with the wait of the coming apocalypse of all the human race knew at that moment. Even the aliens were frightened at that moment because there time was short.
The craters deeppened and lava spewed everywhere, even in places wher volcanoes were extinct or never existed4 ,the earth was ripped in all directions, and those who survived called it doomsday. But even the survivers would die soon, there were tittle waves coming in from sea, monstrous as an elephant, with that crushing sound of rock and bone. Eventually the only things left were the peaks of the himalayas poking from that impenetrable sea.
,the world would breath no longer, for it was December #ad, 2012.
For all its mistakes, that is what my book(comming up soon hopefully) will be about this thing. Comments post them here.
David.
interesting piece of fiction. very popular topic these days too.
Hey. I like it. Just a couple things that bugged me, though:
-(corrected mistakes are in brackets)
-"even in places [where] volcanoes were extinct or never [existed.] [The] earth was ripped in all directions, and those who survived called it doomsday."
-"But even the survivers would die soon, (maybe put a period there, or a semicolon?) there were [tidal] waves coming in from sea, monstrous as an elephant, with that crushing sound of rock and bone."
-"[The] world would [breathe] no longer, for it was December [14,] 2012."
Other than that, I like it. I think it's really interesting. Are you actually getting the book published? If not right away, are you putting it up somewhere on the net? Just curious. Thanks
-Scratch
Scratch, I am not sure if it will be published or not. It may be a while before I finish it. There are many mistakes I have made, and things I still have to finish and research.
I apreciate your help and hope, if not to publish it, then to make an E-Book.
Good book it seems so far. Are you telling a person's story, the story of a group of people, or that of the end of time itself?
Mainly of the end of time, although I'm thinging of ading a main character, a worker of a secret order called the program.
I like it. Yeah, we're gonna see venus cross the sun in 2012 and all hell will break loose.
aaaaaah, everybody, to the bomb shelter!
but it really sounds cool. Hope you finish it and get it published.
Hopefully before 2012. lol